Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some companies sponsor sports as a

way

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to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion. In

this

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competitive world, the majority of companies

is advertising

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are advertising

with various

strategy

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strategies

. Some people believe that being sponsor

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sport

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sporting

events and sportsmen is the best marketing for the

company

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while

other crowd

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the other crowd

thinks that

this

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way

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can create disadvantages. I strongly agree with the former one because of media exposure and linking their name with successfulness. It is a clear that sports have provided

the best means

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a better means

better means

of marketing than ever before. One of the benefits is increasing of media exposure

that is

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helps

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with

advertising of companies.

For instance

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, every year,

sport

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clubs renovate their equipments

such

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as uniforms, and balls

so on

in the near future

soon

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every innovation

require

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requires

financial support, the other companies are

volunteer

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volunteering

volunteers

for

this

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job. In

this

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way

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, they can show their reputation by some events or some competitions. It provides

wide range

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a wide range

of fame.

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, human being likes to contact between two different things.

For

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example when

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example, when

the

company

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compromise with someone who has

becoming

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become

bad reputation

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a bad reputation

because of using

drug

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drugs

or breaking the law,

community

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the community

communities

can square with that

company

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as a

bed

that which is below standard or expectations as of ethics or decency

bad

reputation.

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with that, if they attribute their name with successful

sportman

someone who engages in sports

sportsman

sportsmen

who improves rapidly,

also

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the

company

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link their name with achievement.

On the other hand

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that is

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the fact, some companies have products which can be

damage

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damaging

people

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peoples'

peoples

health.

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Also they

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Also, they

can’t make an agreement with any

sport

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event or

sport

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club. Since, there is not any connection between

two situations

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the two situations

such

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as swimming and smoking.

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However these

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However, these

companies might find advertising with other sectors. To summarize, while some people think

this

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advertisement can cause disadvantages, in my opinion sponsoring sports is

more strong

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a most strong way

most strong way

the most strong way

way

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for

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marketing for the consideration of I mention above.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

316 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Sports sponsorship
financial support
athletes
brand visibility
awareness
commercialization
integrity
dependencies
corporate funds
unethical practices
strategic partnerships
communal relations
promote healthy lifestyles

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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

In many countries today, both men and women need to work full time. Therefore, some people think men and women should share household takes equally (eg. cleaning and looking after children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep. What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep?

In some countries an increasing no of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for government to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. Do you agree or disagree?

Children spend a lot of time watching TV and playing computer game, however it does not help in improving their mental abilities. Do you agree or disagree?