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Some think that resident should be responsible for keeping their areas clean and tidy, while others says it is the government’s responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Today we live in a community where common people and
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government
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the government
 are depend each other. Everyone has their own rights and duties one
such
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 duties are keeping the area neat
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 In the same time the law enforcement is striving hard to join hands with the locals to make the living society clean
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 Numerous people don't have time to look after the cleanliness of the area since most of the people are working
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So many non governmental organizations have been formed to do the social work for cleaning
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 One
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 NGO is ugly
indian
the end of a word (a suffix or inflectional ending or final morpheme)
ending
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 they are a group of young working professionals who come together
in
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on
 the weekends and clean areas.
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 was started in
bangalore
an industrial city in south central India (west of Chennai)
Bangalore
 and now it is spread across the metro cities in the country
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 The
government
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has
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has also come
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 came up with
lot
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lots
a lot
 of plans to keep the
livinghood
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living hood
 clean
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A few years back they introduced
swach bharath scheme
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the such Bharath scheme
swach Bharath scheme
such Bharath scheme
such bharath scheme
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the main aim of
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 is to make awareness among the citizens about the clean
india
either extremity of something that has length
end
. In the yearly
finacial
involving financial matters
financial
 budget the
government
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 has allocated a notable amount for
this
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 work
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 so
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 had a significant impact in the minds of people
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As the cascading effect of
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 the seeing the clean roads in many parts of the country
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It is
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 seen that lot modern techniques are used by them to keep the area tidy. To conclude, it is everyone's duty to make the city clean irrespective of
government
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 or local people.They both are equally responsible for the same.We are in the era where the everyone has to spend some time making the living place
hygine
a condition promoting sanitary practices
hygiene
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