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in many countries, an increase in crime has been blamed on violent images on television and in computer and video games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The
crime
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 is sharply climbing up in our society and few nations consider
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 happening due to violent images on television and in computer and
video
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 games. I completely agree that people will get aggressive and motivated towards
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 by watching these images.
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 of all, teenagers are spending way too much time on social media and playing
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 games.
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, most of the
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 games being designed with violent images, which has the strongest connection towards
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.
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, especially when our young generation finds something unrivalled they always shared and discuss with their colleagues and
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 they forced themselves to attempt that physically. Often parents, cannot keep an eye on their children, due to their tiring scheduled.
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, according to the recent researches, people of the middle age group
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 watching
crime
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 shows on the television, which diverts their mind towards the
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 as most of the drama series related to the serial killer, professional robberies and many more.
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 been noticed that, these types of
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 increasing mainly in the
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 world countries, where the poverty and literacy level plays a vital role.
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, media are publishing a
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 news repeatedly, which
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 drags most of the people attention towards the
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 and sometimes people misconducting with their families and increasing in domestic violence is one the reason. To conclude with, government should take some severe measures with the help of cyber security and other government authorities to improve poverty elevation and literacy rate.
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 other factors should be considered because, only violent images on television and in computer and
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 games cannot be blamed.
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