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working hours today are too long and people are not spending as much time as they should with their families or on leisure activities. What is our opinion on this?

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Nowadays, people are working for long hours and they don’t find time as they should with their families or on other leisure activities. Being mentally healthy is definite and difficult to make it possible when people work for long hours. There is an absolute need
on
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for
 entertainment to live a stress less
life
.
This
 essay will discuss on why working hours should be reduced. Working long hours affects the mental health of people because working without
break
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a break
 for the brain should cause exhaustion to
individuals
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individual
 state. Research says employees who work for long hours are affected with various physical and psychological issues.
For example
,
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,
people working in IT sectors are influenced by agitation, depression, anxiety disorders, aggression and insomnia.
In addition
 working long hours doesn’t let people
to think
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think
 about the ways to get rid out of job stress. For these reasons, long working hours should be reduced
for
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to
 a mentally healthy
life
. In regard to live a stress less
life entertainment
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life, entertainment
 plays a vital role. Entertainment relaxes the brain and makes it calm for a while. It ceases the past
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,
makes us to live the present and prepares
onself
reflexive form of "one"
oneself
 for the future. It produces an enthusiastic energy within
self
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the self
.
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.
For example
, there are four members in our family. All four of us are professionals.
we
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We
 are stuck with our stuffs all the time
.
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.
However
, at the end of the day we find time to talk to each other, share our thoughts
,
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,
feelings and all the flavours that we experienced on the day. We motivate each other and prepare ourselves mentally to meet the
further
 challenges. Even though, people work for long hours, they should try to balance it properly
.
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.
Therefore
,
instead
 of having a difficult cycle, it is good to reduce working
hours which
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hours, which
 contributes for physically and psychologically healthy
life
.
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