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NOWADAYS, FILMS AND COMPUTER GAMES CONTAINING VIOLENCE ARE POPULAR. SOME PEOPLE THINK THOSE FILMLS AND GAMES HAVE NEGATIVE EFFECTS ON SOCIETY AND SHOULD BE BANNED, WHILE OTHERS THINK THEY ARE JUST HARMLESS RELAXATION. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Recently, playing online games and watching movies
are
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is
 most popular activities in every age group. Most of the people and I pursue a thought that the videos and computer games, which contains abuse content are most popular, have a detrimental impact on social order, and should be stopped, whereas others argue that it is
for
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to
 restrain purpose only. Both the aspects are elucidated in the upcoming text followed by my opinion. There are several harmful effects
of
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on
 pictures and games, which contain violence, on society and the foremost one is
lower understanding level
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a lower understanding level
 of
youth
.
Majority
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The majority
 of the games, which are played by
youth
, adolescence and youngsters, contain high visual effects games have more nudity and violent activities, which trigger the
youth
 to teach and commit crime.
Moreover
, an influence of western culture may induce
youth
 to watch nudity and pornography, without any hindrances. PUBG, Tiktok, to illustrate, induce more
youth
 to killing opposite players, and adult videos, which are easily accessible by every
youth
, nowadays. So, they have
disastrous impact
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a disastrous impact
 on
youth
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the youth
 of our culture.
Nevertheless
, many reasons which argue that games and films are only to relax us. The major one is entertainment, music and graphics by which any video game is made, which entice all laymen. By watching
such
 animation type play and show, everyone can restrain themselves from their mundane chores.
Furthermore
, sensational videos, and games are under
vigilance
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the vigilance
 of government bodies. If any highly influence video tamper
youth
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youth's
 mind which obsolete or controlled by them.
Thus
, they are only relaxation purpose. Agglomerating above all the points, it can be said that
although
 there are subtle concepts for entertainment purpose, adult videos and criminality explicit in video and games impact negativity on
youth
 are not eschewed.
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