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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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I personally concur with providing
taller building option
Suggestion
a taller building option
the taller building option
taller building options
.
Although
 creating houses in suburban would be an equally economic development, providing taller building would tackle the housing crisis and lower miles travel.
Initially
, implementing the vertical
city
 development will provide more accommodates for low income household. Currently, single-families are struggling with renting or buying affordable housing to reside in
city
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the city
a city
cities
 while the monthly bills break their bank. As a new graduate, I would be happy to find a rental
on
Suggestion
with
 a budget in
city
Suggestion
a city
cities
the city
 where there are numerous opening positions.
Secondly
, providing more buildings would shorten the
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 time to desire destinations. Most of
buildings
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the buildings
 are built closer to bus stops and subways, so it is easier for residents to reach any places in
city
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the city
a city
cities
,
such
 as convenient stores, pharmacy, and workplace, while long-distance commuters experience traffic congestion every day regardless rush hours. Normally, there is
convenient store downstairs
Suggestion
a convenience store downstairs
convenience store downstairs
 of every building, tenants exclusively walk down to buy groceries. Considering those reasons, I believe local authorities should conduct
upzoning
 to supply affordable accommodations and reduce commute times. These are my personal belief, but I will support whatever the local government
decide
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decides
 to do. I appreciate the opportunity to provide input on
this
 issue
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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