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The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992
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Given are the pie charts that illustrate two patterns of employment, namely manual and non-manual, by sex and occupation in Great Britain in 1992.
Overall
, the percentage of
women
 working non-manually is greater than that of those who work in manual occupations, and the reverse is true for
men
. In the non-manual occupations,
while
 the percentage of
women
 working clerically or relatedly is much greater than that of
men
 (31% to 6%), the proportion of the former employed in managerial and professional positions
are
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 smaller than
men
's one.
Furthermore
, the percentage of
women
 who work non-manually is slightly larger than that of
men
, 69% and 48%, respectively. In manual employment, it can be obviously seen from the chart that the segments of the two genders working as craft workers are
biggest
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the biggest
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 differences.
While
 the number of
female
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females
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 makes up
for
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3%,
this
 figure for
male
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males
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 is 24%.
Besides
, there are only 1% of those two sexes doing other forms of manual work is nearly the same, with 27% of
women
 and 26% of
men
. (174 words)
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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