The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992
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Given are the pie charts that illustrate two patterns of employment, namely manual and non-manual, by sex and occupation in Great Britain in 1992.
Overall
, the percentage of women
working non-manually is greater than that of those who work in manual occupations, and the reverse is true for men
.
In the non-manual occupations, while
the percentage of women
working clerically or relatedly is much greater than that of men
(31% to 6%), the proportion of the former employed in managerial and professional positions are
smaller than Correct subject-verb agreement
is
men
's one. Furthermore
, the percentage of women
who work non-manually is slightly larger than that of men
, 69% and 48%, respectively.
In manual employment, it can be obviously seen from the chart that the segments of the two genders working as craft workers are biggest
differences. Correct article usage
the biggest
While
the number of female
makes up Fix the agreement mistake
females
for
3%, Change preposition
apply
this
figure for male
is 24%. Fix the agreement mistake
males
Besides
, there are only 1% of those two sexes doing other forms of manual work is nearly the same, with 27% of women
and 26% of men
.
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