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many university students live with their families,while other live away from home because their university are in different places. what are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations

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These days,
manyfold
a pipe that has several lateral outlets to or from other pipes
manifold
 graduate students can have an opportunity to live with their family members whilst others have to live far from their house on account of long distance between home and a study place. In
this
 essay, I will look through certain pros and cons of
this
 issue.
Firstly
, it should be noted that living in a house with a family can be useful for
fullfilling
put in effect
fulfilling
 the personal needs of the student like doing households or other actions which are done at home.
Morover
in addition
Moreover
,
family
Suggestion
the family
families
a family
 might dedicate a great motivation to advance in an academic
life
.
For instance
, when students have particularly challenging tasks from their universities, they habitually do not have enough time to care about themselves or their households. In
this
 case, they lack of other's help more than any time.
This
 is why, living with family members can create a comfortable opportunity
ofr
appropriate to; intended for
for
 students to do well at university.
Moreover
, it is commonly considered that family is a great source of motivation, especially when students have
desperate feeling
Suggestion
a desperate feeling
the desperate feeling
 with their lives. Parents could encourage their children to overcome
this challenges
Suggestion
these challenges
this challenge
 in a
life
.
On the other hand
, living with a family whilst studying would often disturb the students during the essential moments and certain
revisons
the act of revising or altering (involving reconsideration and modification)
revisions
revision
 for examinations.
Furthermore
, if students live in a family, they would have to be involved
to
Suggestion
with
in
 distinctive problems in a family and they might have any misunderstanding with one of their family members, because every person
live
Suggestion
lives
 in his or her own world and plans. These aforementioned situations might cause to the dissatisfaction of students with their study and
life
,
in addition
 to advance in the
life
. Taking everything into consideration, because of long distance between a university and home, if students have to live in a family, it would be more convenient for them in terms of their
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 or other common needs
such
 as doing regular households and effective
ispiration
arousal of the mind to special unusual activity or creativity
inspiration
 to succeed in an academic
life
.
Nontheless
Suggestion
Nonetheless
, there are certain disadvantages as well like the
possiblity
a future prospect or potential
possibility
 of bothering the students in busy conditions or certain conflicts with family members.
However
, personally I believe that the advantages of living in a family can
outweight
be heavier than
outweigh
 the disadvantages.
Submitted by Ganisher Karshiev on

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