Each year , the crime rate is increases . What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity ?

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The increasing number of
crimers
(criminal law) an act punishable by law; usually considered an evil act
crimes
are choosing more crime to make a living and their rate is going up year by year
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organizes
is organized
by some people who do not have constant work places
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they have to worry about
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themselves
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one of the persons who compose a social group (especially individuals who have joined and participate in a group organization)
members
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way becomes their easy habit to make money
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matter authorities should pay close attention to prisoners and government should enlist them
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There may be
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a low number
low numbers
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felonies
when criminals are employed
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In today's world more and more people are
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overworked
and some parents have not enough time to pas attention their children's routine
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They try to make a living well and they work almost half a day
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atmosphere causes children to follow the path of crime
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there is not any checker for them and they go
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outside and make
friends with whomever they want
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parents should be careful daily life of their child and they need to engage their children in a variety of after - school activities
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crime rate is likely to fall
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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