some people believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life.

The bar chart represents the percentage of British employees five industries in two years, 1841 and 2011. Overall, there were different trends between industries
after
Suggestion
over
270 years. Some industries were decreased in 2011. The
first
industry is manufacturing. It was a little above
third
in 1741 and after 270 years, it decreased by about 26%. The
second
item is agriculture or fishing. It decreased from 22% in 1841 to 1 % in 2011. The
last
item is energy or water. It was the lowest percentage in 1841 and 2011 which was under ten percent.
On the other hand
, some industries were
rose
come into existence; take on form or shape
arisen
arose
in the twentieth century. The percentage of services were
third
in 1841 which was
rise
Suggestion
rising
considerably to four-fifths. The
second
item that increased is
construction
Suggestion
constructed
.
Firstly
, it was 5% in 1841 but after 270 years, it increased by about 3% becoming 8% in 2011.
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