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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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The bar chart demonstrates how often the people eat fast
food
 at hotels in the USA
form
a giver or sender
from
 2003 to 2013. The data
is given
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are given
in fraction
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an infraction
infraction
. Focusing on the year of 2003, more than 30% of people had their
food
 at hotels at once a
week
 in the USA. It was a
highest
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high
higher
 frequency of eating fast
food
 at restaurants in 2003. 30% of people ate outside of their home at once or twice a month, which was just doubled as much as figures for their counterparts who did several
time
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times
 a
week
. Almost 14% of USA populations choose
eat
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to eat
 at fast
food
 hotels of few times in a year. By 2006, the proportion of several times a
week
 was increased by 5% in
USA
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the USA
. And, a frequency of
eat
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eating
 at
restaurant
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a restaurant
restaurants
the restaurant
 at least once a
week
 was
also
 rose and peaked at ever maximum with 33% in America.
However
, the ratio of people, who were consuming their meal at
hotels
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the hotels
 in once or twice a month, was decreased by 5%. The proportion of people, who eat everyday and never at restaurants were remained almost same in
USA
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the USA
 for the same year.
However
, in 2013, the amount of people, who choose
ate
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to eat
 their
food
 at hotels in several times a
week
 and once a
week
 dropped by almost 4
% but
Accept comma addition
%, but
 the ratio of once or twice a month was dramatically surged and peaked at 33% in 2013. Overall, it is observed that the frequencies for once a
week
 and once or twice a
week
 were the major choices for Americans who had meals out of
home
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the home
. The percentage for eating outside
everyday
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every day
 and never were remained almost stable over
ten years period
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a ten year period
ten year period
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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