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Some people say history is one the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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It is said that the extinction of certain species
such
 as plants and animals is a major environmental problem. While others think that other environmental problems are more critical. I will discuss both views in
this
 essay.
First
 of all, plants and animals maintain the environmental balance in the world. If they die, the environment faces many difficulties.
For example
, earthworms are called farmer ploughs. Earthworms live underground and remain fertile, which helps farmers grow more crops. If it is extinct from the soil, farmers need to use chemical fertilizers and have a negative impact on the environment.
Therefore
, the loss of several types of plants and animals increases environmental problems.
Therefore all
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Therefore, all
 we have to do is preserve animals and plants so that they do not become extinct. It is done for the long-term preservation of nature.
On the other hand
, there are so many significant environmental problems
such
 as global warming and
pollution
. The average temperature of the world is increasing day by day. After that the Arctic glacier melted and raised the sea level and flooded the lower places. Other major problems
such
 as air
pollution
, water
pollution
, noise
pollution
, etc. Air
pollution
 can cause respiratory illnesses and skin diseases
such
 as asthma.
For example
, WHO estimated in 2007 that air
pollution
 causes half a million people die per year in India. So, there are many reasons for environmental problems.
Therefore
, what we can do now to reduce the environmental problem is to reduce the use of private vehicles that can cause air
pollution
. It is better to use public transportation
such
 as bus or bicycle to be healthier. We can
also
 reduce water
pollution
 by not polluting the environment
such
 as throwing trash into rivers or other places. In short, the loss of certain plants and animals is not only a major cause of environmental problems but
also
 includes more problems. To prevent environmental problems, people around the world need to work to save plants and animals together by preventing different
pollution
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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