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the plans below show the layout of a university's sports centre now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The new university sports
centre
 will be totally different from the old one. All of the facilities will be replaced and adding more
place
 for students to entertaining. The old university sports
centre
 will be expanded to a bigger
place
 there will be no more outdoor courts. The original area like gyms, seating, changing room and 25m pool are kept but the gym room is a lot
more bigger
Suggestion
bigger
 than
usal
occurring or encountered or experienced or observed frequently or in accordance with regular practice or procedure
usual
 so it will have more types of the
work out
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
workout
 machine and that
also
 allow more students to work out once at a time. The update
centre
is added
Suggestion
adds
 a lot of entertaining
place
Suggestion
places
 like
two
in the direction of
to
 dance studio, two more changing rooms which we will have three changing rooms in total, sports shop, a café, sports hall and a leisure pool. They planned
to added
Suggestion
to be added
 these to increase
amount
Suggestion
the amount
 of the students that would like to have
place
Suggestion
a place
 to hang out with friends and
also
 create more profit by
added
Suggestion
adding
 the sports hall, sports shop and a café. In conclusion, the brand new
centre
 can
amazed
Suggestion
amaze
 a lot of
student
Suggestion
students
 and
increas
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
increases
 the income of the university by knowing how to use the land in the smart way.
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