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These days, people work in more than one job and often change career several times during their life. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

#people #work #job #change #career #times #life
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I will start by analysing the advantages of changing
career
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careers
 several times during the lifetime. One of the greatest benefits of having more than one job is that it is easier to earn
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. Generally speaking, many students find an occupation so as to be able to become independent from their parents in terms of
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.
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 they find some trivial jobs,
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 as being a cleaner, they can become professional specialists after having finished their studies. Another major positive aspect is that people are able to focus on their main job and
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 do something else after their
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 which might be more interesting. In my experience, I used to
work
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 as a software developer for an enterprise and read lectures at a university. It was beneficial due to fact that I earned enough
money
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 and it was exciting to share my knowledge with students.
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, there are some disadvantages too - one of them
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is
 the inability to concentrate on your career goals.
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, it can be pretty difficult to devote yourself to the
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that is
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 the most important to you because either you may not prioritise your jobs or you lack time.
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, noteworthy is the fact that it becomes much harder to acquire the required experience. Another significant drawback of having many jobs is that the life-
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 balance deteriorates.
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, for many, people feel inferior if they lack qualification in their new occupation. It is quite a frequent situation as it is tough to gain a wide variety of
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 experience. In conclusion, the pros and cons of having and switching many jobs were described. In my view, the disadvantages outweigh disadvantages and it is suggested that people should
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 in many places only if they need
money
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 or only temporarily due to other causes.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Skill diversification
  • Versatile
  • Professional network
  • Career advancement
  • Job satisfaction
  • Personal fulfillment
  • Market value
  • Job insecurity
  • Financial strain
  • Specialization
  • Adjustment periods
  • Unemployment
  • Deep expertise
  • Long-term benefits
  • Retirement plans
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