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People are having more and more sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons? What are the solutions to make people drink less.

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Modern conditions
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 as diabetes and related health problems are probably associated with the upward trend towards consuming sugary drinks on a daily basis. Two of the main causes will
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 be explored, and light will be shone on one possibly effective measure to deal with
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 consumption. Appetite seems to be the most important factor contributing to
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 increasing tendency. It has been customary for decades for sugar-based beverages to be an indispensable part of modern life, ranging from parties and ceremonies to even small daily snacks. It is now not unusual to see soft drinks nearly everywhere on earth. Another essential causal factor is hospitality as a social etiquette. Many people are not really interested in sweet drinks, but when they are welcomed with
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 drinks, they find it hard to reject them. Simply saying no might hurt the host. For the aforesaid reasons, the best solution is to make an effort to change
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 drinking habit. Challenging as it is, we have to figure out how to do so. Suddenly stopping
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 practice would be impractical, so it would be advisable to advocate the reduction of sugar amounts in drinks and gradually replacing them with sugar-free drinks is not impossible. In conclusion, whether people are fond of drinking sugary beverages or not, everyone needs to be aware of the danger of diabetes and related problems. It is time they halted and adopted a healthier habit.
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 we are still not scientifically sure of what causes diabetes, it is safer and wiser not to consume too much sugar.
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