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Some people suggest that schools should pay more attention to academic subjects for children because these subjects are useful for their future career. They think that subjects like music and sport are not useful and should be reduced. What is your opinion?

#people #schools #attention #subjects #children #future #career #music #sport
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When we talk about
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 subjects, especially when coming from a
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 which had 15 mandatory subjects a year,
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 thing is evident- there is something for everyone to choose from. Many people have a favourite subject at
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 and they can very much differ from person to person. It is an open discussion which
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 subject is the most important
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. Some people say History is
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 of the most important
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 subjects. The fact is that learning from the experiences is the best way to learn. I believe that occupations in politics and social sciences do very much depend on the history classes since they are full of successful and not so successful outcomes. Others would argue that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Everyone has at least once heard a story that the future
lays
tell an untruth; pretend with intent to deceive
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 in those hands of the Technology. “Study IT- that will bring you a steady well-paid job” many people from my environment used to emphasize. But what if I have no ambition to work in computer science-related jobs? My opinion is that there is not
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 most important
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 subject. I believe that elementary and secondary schools perform a good job of selecting a wide range of important subjects, in which everyone can find their cup of tea. While the future might bring higher demand for Technology-related jobs, people will still need doctors, lawyers and
bakers
a financier who owns or is an executive in a bank
bankers
. At the end of the day, what is most important is to do what you truly enjoy. Having different preferences and pyramids of importance
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 us special and more interesting. The world would be a boring place if we all thought the same.
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