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Government must be held accountable for prohibition of detrimental elements of addiction like

alchol

a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent

alcohol

and tobacco.It is the primary

responsibilty

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

of a state to provide a safe environment

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for

its citizens.I agree with the notion, that due to several health and

socio-economic

involving social as well as economic factors

socioeconomic

problems, these injurious items must not be allowed for consumption.

Firstly

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, Health is a basic concern of any community,

thats

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that's

why these addictive items should be out of excessive utility.Many injurious diseases like cancer

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T.B are results of usage.

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similarly people

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Similarly, people

Similarly people

face worst mental disorders

such

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as depression and anxiety.Even young people who are the future of

nation

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the nation

nations

a nation

, are destroying their health by indulging in

such

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activities.

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Thus in

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Thus, in

order to save the nation

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Government

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the Government

Governments

should be attentive in taking strict actions,

espacially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

for under age consumers of

alchol

a liquor or brew containing alcohol as the active agent

alcohol

and

cigrattes

finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking

cigarettes

etc.

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, adults should be permitted for the limited usage only

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which is once a week as recommended by FDA.Making rules and limits of consumption can at least save the public from health hazards.

Furthermore

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, criminal activities are mostly at the part of addictive people.Addicts are

commiting

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

committing

many illegal acts in order to get these substances.In

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last few decades

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the last few decades

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75% offenders of theft

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murder and snatching were

addictive

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addicted

individuals.

Moreover

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, after consumption people shoe the inappropriate behaviour towards

public

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the public

, which is again a social disaster.By looking at all

issue

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issues

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Government

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the Government

should formulate laws against the intake. In conclusion

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not only

alcholism

habitual intoxication; prolonged and excessive intake of alcoholic drinks leading to a breakdown in health and an addiction to alcohol such that abrupt deprivation leads to severe withdrawal symptoms

alcoholism

and tobacco

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but all addictive materials should be completely prohibited and restricted by the Government policies.As a citizen is righteous to demand his safety and well being from the ruling

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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