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The government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Thus it’s the governments’ responsibility to ban alcohol and tobacco as they are addictive substances and harmful.

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Government must be held accountable for prohibition of detrimental elements of addiction like alcohol and tobacco.It is the primary responsibility of a state to provide a safe environment for its citizens.I agree with the notion, that due to several health and socioeconomic problems, these injurious items must not be allowed for consumption.
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, Health is a basic concern of any community, that's why these addictive items should be out of excessive utility.Many injurious diseases like cancer
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similarly people
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Similarly, people
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 face worst mental disorders
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 as depression and anxiety.Even young people who are the future of the nation, are destroying their health by indulging in
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 activities.
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 order to save the nation, the Government should be attentive in taking strict actions, especially for under age consumers of alcohol and cigarettes etc.
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, adults should be permitted for the limited usage only
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which is once a week as recommended by FDA.Making rules and limits of consumption can at least save the public from health hazards.
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, criminal activities are mostly at the part of addictive people.Addicts are committing many illegal acts in order to get these substances.In
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, 75% offenders of theft, murder and snatching were addicted individuals.
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, after consumption people shoe the inappropriate behaviour towards the public, which is again a social disaster.By looking at all issues, the Government should formulate laws against the intake. In conclusion, not only alcoholism and tobacco, but all addictive materials should be completely prohibited and restricted by the Government policies.As a citizen is righteous to demand his safety and well being
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