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Eating sweet foods produces acid in the mouth, which can cause tooth decay. (High acid levels are measured by low pH values) Describe the information below and discuss the implications for dental health.

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Studies
have been showed
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have shown
show
are showing
showed
 that the acid production after consuming sweet foods could increase the risk of tooth decay. The line chart is
illustrating
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illustrated
 three different sweet foods and the acidity level of
mouth
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 environment after consuming them. Overall, it can be seen that the lowest
PH
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 in
mouth
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 happens around 5-10 minutes after eating all types of sweet foods
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Fruit, Can
sugar
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 and Honey).
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, it is obvious that Honey is the healthiest
sugar
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 for teeth since it produces less acidic materials. Regarding Honey, it can be concluded that it makes
mouth
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 environment’s acidic levels to increase up to a
PH
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 of approximately 4.8 after 5-10 minutes and
then
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 starts to decrease steadily until it reaches back to the normal
PH
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 of
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mouth
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the mouth
, which is seven.
On the other hand
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, Can
sugar
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 could increase
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mouth’s
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the mouth’s PH
PH
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 significantly to 3.5 in just 5 minutes. After that it starts to decrease.
However
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, it keeps
mouths
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mouthing
environment
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environment, PH
PH
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 below 5.5 after almost 33minutes, which tooth decay could occur. Fruit sugars diagram, have the same pattern as Honey and Can
sugar
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, but it makes the
mouth
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 to be in the acidic level at which tooth decay occurs, just for 20 minutes after the moment which is eaten.
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