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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. -explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months - say how your work could be done while you are away - ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr Louis, Having worked under your supervision for more than 4 years, I have certainly learnt a great deal about our company and my roles as a product development
team
 member. I am writing to show my appreciation and to seek your permission to work in our head office in Sydney, Australia. Recently, I have come to know about a 6-month program, which is about to start in a few weeks at our company head office, focusing solely on “niche product development techniques” for new recruits. The program may have been designed for the new talents of our company, but I feel like a seasoned employee like me would
also
 be able to benefit a lot from
such
 an initiative
such
 initiative that doesn’t really come by every now and
then
. I have already arranged for a couple of very talented interns to help our
team
. I have
also
 requested other
team
 members of my
team
 to take the additional responsibilities in my absence, and they all agreed.
Moreover
, I will be able to communicate and help my
team
 over the phone and emails whenever required. Now, only if you are kind enough to take the lead in arranging a transfer to the head office by citing my reasons for it to the upper management, should I be able to join the program in due time. Thank you for your help in advance.
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Yours sincerely, Gerd Müller
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