Many University students live with their families ; while others live away from house because their universities are in different places. what are advantages and disadvantages of both situations

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University freshmen are young and enthusiastic. Most of the
times
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time
students have
privilege
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the privilege
to stay with families and attend their choice of their grad
schools while
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schools, while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
have to relocate to an independent niche.
Although
living with guardians gives a sense of security, but it cannot outweigh the
indepence
an inability to resist the gratification of whims and desires
indulgence
one
gets on being on your own when living alone.
This
essay shall discuss both situations in details. On
one
hand those
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hand, those
living with
their parents neither
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neither their parents
have to worry about expenditures nor managing their daily chores. They get fresh laundry, hot cooked delicacies and free time for recreational activities. They have more savings. The family bond grows stronger when
one
lives together. While
on the contrary
, those living away from home have a completely different story.
starting
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Starting
from morning tea to self cooked dinner nights, everything is self done.
For instance
, when I went to Banglore on a two-month training course, it felt like the entire world is upside down. I was cooking quick meals to attend lectures on time, linen was piled up for weekends and shortage of money made me look out for efficient management skills.
Consequently we
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Consequently, we
can say, it had
positive impact
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a positive impact
the positive impact
of teaching me utilisation of menial resources
productively
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products
production
. To sum up with, it will be correct to say that it is not easy to sail our boat when the weather is rough, but
one
must learn the art to keep it going.
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