You and your family visit the local shopping mall every week. However, it has become more and more difficult to find a parking spot recently. You would like to let the shopping mall manager know about this problem. Describe the problem you are having with the mall’s parking. Explain what you and your family have to do in order to visit the shopping mall now. Provide some suggestions for how the mall manager can solve this problem.

Dear Customer Service Manager
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Please consider
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letter as formal concern about
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the parking spot problem
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problem. The huge shopping centre with insufficient parking
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, intend me had bad experience of
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finding
a car parking in
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the short term
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Also we
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Also, we
need to wait to pass the traffic light before we get in parking
spot
, sometimes when people feel critical they would just ignore the all way stop sign.
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chance to case an accident
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happens
happened
. Since people love to hang out in
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a shopping mall
the shopping mall
shopping malls
which mean their car will be parked outside for
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long periods
a long period
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and there are no time limited parking
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especially for
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customers
a customer
who easy come and easy go. I've been a loyal customer for 10years and the shopping mall distance to my location is only 5 minutes driving
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So we are visiting the local shopping mall every week and do grocery shopping; because there have popular supermarket and we are really
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enjoying
enjoyable
. Apparently we spend less than an
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hour
stay in there. By the way, my sincere suggestion is to hire professional directing traffic as law enforcement officers and add specific parking as fast-time limit zone. Faithfully yours, Ben Kim
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