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The plans below show the layout of a university's sports center now and how it will look after redevelopment. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The diagrams below show the present building of a sports
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 and plans for its improvement. In general, the outdoor courts are planned to be removed and expanded the gym and adding a lot more facilities. At the moment, the university’s main building is surrounded by extensive outdoor courts. The upcoming plan is to remove that and replace it with the leisure pool at the Western and the size is much bigger than the old one and
also
 add a new changing room and a sports shop too.
Besides
 that, the eastern side will expand the gym room and connected to two new dance studios.
This
 site will
also
 build up a new sports hall. They
also
 added a new changing room which is mirrored with the new one on the western side, and they
also
 have a new café. The entrance, the reception will not be replaced. The update
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 is added to a lot of fascinating places like two dance studios, two more changing rooms which we will have three changing rooms in total, a sports shop, a café, a sports hall, and a leisure pool. They planned to add these to increase the amount of the students that would like to have a place to hang out with friends and
also
 create more profit by attaching the sports hall, sports shop, and a café. In conclusion, the brand new
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 can amaze many students and increase the income of the university by knowing how to use land smartly. �C
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