Today the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The advertisement
An advertisement
is not only about appearance of
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the product's
a product's
visual but
also
about how to move people's preference to use our
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. There is a view recently, that the good sale number of famous products
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reflects
the power of advertising and the real needs of the community is not
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a priority
anymore. In my opinion, I completely disagree with
this
point of view.
First
of all, it is a common knowledge that in economic
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a basic generalization that is accepted as true and that can be used as a basis for reasoning or conduct
principle
, production number follows the quantity of demand. If we try to understand
this
statement in detail, it is not only about the power of
advertisement but
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advertisement, but
also
the needed amount of the
product
itself as a main reason why the purchasing
value
is higher.
For instance
, an indie brand or local brand could sell a certain number of the consumer goods without a ton of advertising in mass media or using
pricey model
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a pricey model
the pricey model
. It proofed that a main factor of selling a
comodity
articles of commerce
commodity
is not about advertising only.
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, nowadays the main reason people buy things do not depend on the
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needed, but
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to
the
value
of the
product
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are
have been
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to the craft they made so that consumers want to pay for it. In
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the example
, I invest my money to get clothes from a marginal local brand because by buying them I contribute to help a local tailor. In
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case, I buy that
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thing
because of its
value
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to
the advertisement. In conclusion, a high sale
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advertisement, but
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