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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
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 with regard to your advertisement in one of the Australian magazine for the position of
baby-sitter
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babysitter
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 to look after your
six-year old
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 kid.
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 job is of particular interest as I am great with kids, and
also
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 I could render support to my family on financial grounds. Being the eldest daughter in my family, I have nurtured seven of my younger siblings for several years.
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,
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 opportunity would help me recuperate from my recent losses. During my college years, I have done part-time
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babysitting
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baby sitting
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babysitting
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 in my neighbourhood vicinity. Recently, I had
baccalaureate
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a baccalaureate
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 in childcare from the
university
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University
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 of Toronto, and have a valid license for
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 job. While waiting for your response, I shall reach out to my earlier clients for recommendation letters
which
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 could aid you in the
decision making
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 process.
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 I would be spending the majority of my hour
to take
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 care of your kid, during leisure time I would like to read, visit
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the museum
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museum
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 and other architectural wonders. Rather
indulging
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 in these activities alone, provided permission I would love to take the younger one to nearby libraries,
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a museum
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museum
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 to teach new information and help to channelize the thought process. I would be grateful if I could hear you at your earliest possible convenience. Yours faithfully, Subbu Arumugam Gandhi
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Childcare, Nurturing, Patience, Creativity, Early childhood development
  • Babysitting, Au pair, Engaging, Responsible, Enthusiastic
  • Safety, Trustworthy, Adaptability, Proactive, Cultural exchange
  • Activities, Educational games, Language skills, Exploring
  • Volunteering, Community involvement, Australian culture
  • Flexibility, Personal traits, Schedule, Enrichment
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