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Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Different people contain varied opinion about the
job
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 and its allied benefits. A section of them
prefer
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prefers
 to enjoy deep contentment and peace of mind in the
work
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 they are doing while rest others consider fixed carrier or their long term monetary and other allied benefits. In my opinion, long lasting
job
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 should be opted for the
security
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 of
life
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 and family. I believe that permanent position at the
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work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 in today’s competitive world, signifies the most as a person grasp hard education to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
 his aspiration and dreams. Not only
this
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, but
also
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 their parents compromise a lot for the sake of their children's future. Lifetime
security
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 of
work
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 provides a sense of financial
security
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 and stress free
life
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 in present cut throat competition. Money can be invested for future prospect after having a regular flow of income which ease the
life
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 without any financial burden.
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, stable income maintains the joy and happiness in
one
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's family and
life
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. On
other hand
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the other hand
, a section of people avoids to be glued at
one
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 position. They argue for enjoying the
job
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 and
work
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,
instead
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 of compromising their pleasure for maintaining
security
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 of
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job
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jobs
a job
.
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, they opine that successful professional carrier brings positive impact on their personal arena.
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, gratification can be felt, even without
security
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 at the
work
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 place
,
Accept space
,
 if he or she enjoys what he does.
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, serenity in profession is deeply rooted, if
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 enjoys what he does. To sum up,
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job
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 satisfaction remains a crucial part in
one
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's professional carrier,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 suppose
security
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 of occupation is the utmost significant factor for living
life
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 without facing any financial burden and stress. Certainly, if
future
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the future
 is secure, there is no way to look back.
Submitted by Shweta Pawar on

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