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As most people spend a major part of their life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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People have different belief about whether
job
satisfaction
 is superior to
job security
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the job security
 of a permanent
job
.
Thus
, I believe that, it is extremely important that their
job
 is both rewarding and fulfilling. In
this
 essay, I will examine factors related to
job
satisfaction
 and how realistic these factors are.
First
 of all, the most important reason that people work is for the money.
However
,
job
satisfaction
 is not only limited to financial reward.
For instance
, a recent survey by
a
Suggestion
an
 HR firm that people working in a high paying
job
 are 80% happier than those who are not. The office environment and the long term prospect of the career path are equally important.
For example
, people whose efforts are not being appreciated by their company will not be enjoying what they are doing.
On the other hand
, many people may be enjoying their
job but
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job, but
 the limited money that they earn might make them unhappy with their profession.
For example
, many artists find it difficult to make a living even though they may feel lucky to be doing what they love. A person needs to be doing a
job
 that they enjoy, working for a company with
great environment
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a great environment
, and getting paid for what they deserve
,
Accept space
,
 in order to have a highly satisfied career. All these components are essential to achieving
job
satisfaction
. Realistically, it is not easy for someone to have all that under the same roof. In conclusion, it is very difficult to get an ideal
job
 that satisfies all the requirements of
job
satisfaction
.
However
, everyone can still be happy with reporting to work
everyday
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every day
 if they are willing to make some sacrifices.
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