Today many children spend a lot of time playing computer games and a little time on sports. Why is it? Is it a positive or negative development?

In
this
day and age, children have long forgotten about physical sports and find themselves invested in digital games, which in my opinion are harmful for their physical health as well as gives them a false sense of achievement. Today games
such
as Pub-g ang grand theft auto are trending and marketing agencies have played a huge role in there demand, hooking our kids to their play stations and computer every
second
, depriving them with any physical activity
thus
taking them
further
away from actual sports
such
as football or basketball which can be harmful for their bodies as
this
can result in various physical ailment
such
as obesity, neck pain and eye sight problems. Kids these days, get hooked on
such
digital games as they are easily accessible to them, as well as provide a great sense of achievement as they move up from one level to another just by sitting in their living room,
such
triumph can be helpful at a certain level but
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
kids forget the real effort it takes to achieve a task.
For example
, a kid who spent his whole childhood making a cartoon character move through the controller in his hands, won’t learn
lesson
Suggestion
a lesson
lessons
about how much teamwork and responsibility it takes to win a cricket match. In conclusion, playing games can be harmful for the children,
thus
should be allowed for a limited time as well as elders should encourage them to play actual physical sport.
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