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In some countries around the world, men and women are having babies late in life. What are the reasons? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In some nations all over the world, couples have an intention of giving birth to a child
late
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later
 after getting married.
This
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 trend can be attributed to a myriad of reasons and personally I think it leads to more shortcomings than benefits. It is understandable why some spouses do not want to have children as soon as possible. The key rationale is the fact that they need to devote their time in succession earning a living so as to stabilize their life.
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, they
can not
can not
cannot
 strike a balance between working and rearing a child.
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, they take priority over fulfilling their career ambition and becoming professional in their field, which allows them to build a solid financial support for their child in the future.
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, in some big cities, many youngsters complain
for
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of
about
 the high cost of living and it makes them scare of having
baby
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babies
 since they lack a huge amount of money to. Actually, not only can feeding a family be a burdensome for young couples, but offering high quality education for their offspring could
also
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 be a daunting task. One of the most perturbing impacts caused by
this
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 trend is that late childbearing may give elderly parturient women pregnancy problems, and some even deadly.
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, the baby may have
higher risk
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a higher risk
 of having genetic disorders and be mentally retarded when the mother is not young enough.
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, if more and more women delay birthing, people might have to live in a society with the problem of
ageing population
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an ageing population
ageing populations
. For all intents and purposes, it ends up with more pressure on feeding the elderly for future generations. In conclusion,
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 young couples have better preparation for parents work and financial support, the risk for individuals and society should not be ignored. The analysis seems to indicate that it has more demerits for society and country than its merits.
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