Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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Having a shelter over one's head is really important and

thus

the requirement of a house is necessary. Building houses to live in totally depends on one's perspective. Few consider constructing taller buildings to save the

area whereas

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area, whereas

few prefer constructing houses

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a wider area. Both the type of construction have their own pro's and con's

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My view regarding the same is that if we construct taller buildings

then

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than

it might be dangerous at some point. During the time of natural calamity like earthquake, lightening etc.

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can be risky living in a tall building. If not

constructed keeping

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constructed, keeping

all the parameters in mind, during the time of

earthquake

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the earthquake

a tall building may collapse, leading to damage to

lives

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the lives

of many people. In case of

thunder lightening

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thunder, lightening

may fall at its earliest on the taller buildings. And

also

in case of fire it would be very difficult to evacuate the place again leading to loss of lives. From the past experiences we can clearly see that in taller builds it becomes very difficult to handle

such

situations. Whereas if we plan to build a house

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a wider area of land we won't be prone to

such

kinds of risks.

Moreover we

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Moreover, we

can stay near to the ground and experience the touch and the essence of the Mother Earth. As there is a very nice saying that one should stay connected to the ground,

similarly

this

implies here as well. When we build

house

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houses

lower level we

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the lower level, we

the lower level we

can help the nature by taking care it.

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Prediction or recommendation

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

258 words

4.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

urban density
sustainability
public transportation
green spaces
community connections
overcrowding
economic implications
infrastructure impact
maintenance costs
carbon footprint
compact city
habitat destruction
greenhouse gas emissions

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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Many employees can now do their work from home using modern technology. However, this change may only benefit workers, not the employers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Write a letter to the manager of the HR department of a company requesting information about the interview that you attended but still waiting for results. In your letter, •describe the position you applied for •why you think the interview went well • why you need the result of the interview

There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? what can be done to solve this problems?

The widespread use of Internet has brought many problems. What do you think are the main problems associated with the use of Internet? What solutions can you suggest?