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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The transformation of
town
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the town
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the
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into the
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 town
center
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centre
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 area is depicted in the two maps. Other than the eastern and western areas which have been left undeveloped , the central part is undergoing noticeable changes mainly through the addition of paths , housing and other facilities.
Firstly
 ,
main
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the main
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 road , which is in middle is lined with shops , connects opposite sides of the town
center
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centre
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 and
additionally
 allows access to the park and school . shops
in
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on
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northern
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the northern
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 side of the road
supposed
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are supposed
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 to be replaced by a bus station , shopping
center
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centre
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, car park and new houses.
In addition
main
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the main
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 road
in
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is
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 going to be ruined and
then
pavement
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the pavement
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 is designed
instead
 . To the north ,
countryside
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the countryside
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 will be demolished and new accommodations will be instructed between
park
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the park
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 , which is smaller than now, and older houses .
Then
 all these buildings and constructions , except
school
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the school
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 and living area in
south
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the south
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 , are
being
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apply
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surrounded by
Dual
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a Dual
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 carriageway which is in oval shape .
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