The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourage people not to socialize. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

It is obvious,
internet
connection helps us be in touch with our friends and relatives easily and
cheaper but
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cheaper, but
negatively affecting on socializing and individualism, has been mentioned.
to
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To
a certain extend
internet
might have disadvantages on social life and
characteristics whereas
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characteristics, whereas
it should be utilized in an appropriate manner in order to have more positive functions. Certainly, it can be inevitably seen that the problem has
risen
come into existence; take on form or shape
arisen
due to the improper and
indiscipline act
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indiscipline acts
of users themselves. Nowadays playing virtual games and online talking have become popular. Almost, everybody
have
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has
their own mobile phone, and they can use it for online gaming, chatting or browsing. With all the attractive and entertaining applications, many people like to play around with their gadget for hours and abandon their social life.
As a result
, many families are having communication problems these days due to they have less time for an eye to eye contact with other family members. Anyway, except all mentioned problems,
internet
connection has made connecting with our siblings who are living far from us available.
several
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Several
years ago, if family members were not lucky enough to accommodate in a same area, they would not have the chance of seeing each other many times. By use of
this
adorable innovation, lots of applications have been designed which make people able to make video calls and see their family members.
students
Suggestion
Students
,
for instance
, who have gone abroad can share their daily life in their new hometown with their parents to ensure them everything is fine.
Moreover
, making a voice call is lower cost compared to making a normal phone call without the
internet
. Clearly the cheaper the better, and more people try to use it
instead
of traditional connecting ways. In short
,
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,
although
internet
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the internet
can limit our present relationships in
real world
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the real world
as a result
of not having a certain plan for it
,
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,
it could have merits for a lot of people like international students or people who want to reduce their cost of living by replacing old ways of making a phone call with voice calls
.
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.
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