A big salary is much more important than a job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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A high paying position is not important than job satisfaction, as a well paid profession can be more stressful and demanding.
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a job with a hefty pay cheque is generally stressful and can lead to ill well-being. The position which can give you good money to lead a luxurious life will not give you enough time to spend with family and lead a healthy life,
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my boss who is drawing a multifold higher salary than me will have to spend most of his hour thinking about office
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team management
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official touring, meeting sales targets so on and so forth.
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, I report him with a much smaller team to manage, less things to worry about officially and more time to spend with family, which is a stress buster by itself, but of course I earn less than him. As reported in newspapers, mostly on daily basis, well paid middle aged managers of well known Multinational companies are more prone for cardiac arrests, which is one of the serious health issues which can be caused by stress.
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my opinion satisfaction is very important than what you earn from it. The work done by any individual should give him/her a sense of fulfilment and one should like the profession which will help the individual to grow both professionally and personally. According to a study done by the university of placements it is shown that people who are working in a healthy office environment with a good satisfaction are more likely to perform more efficiently with less employee recession and will
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lead a very healthy life with very less health issues to be worried about. To conclude, it is always better to work under less stressful conditions, even if it is a slightly lower paying profession than holding a very high position and salary with a lot of stress, responsibilities, no time for family and oneself. All the above said things can put one's physical and mental health in jeopardy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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