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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing? Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
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We are
live
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living
 in the
internet
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 time and the
internet
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 help the companies to
growth
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grow
 their sales. Which means that they can sale their products around the world. I agree and I think
this
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 event impact of their decision to use online shops
instead
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 of shops in the cities. The progress of online shopping impact on the
people
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person's
life
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 and they can have a better
life
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.
First
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 of all, Today the issue of traffic jams is the biggest problem in the cities. Which means that most people use own car on the shopping way. So they waste many hours on the way and in a traffic
jams
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jam
 and they can not to save their
life
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.
Secondly
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, people can find
more good
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better
 offers
on
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at
 the online shops. On the
internet
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 the online shops have a lot of visitors.
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 people can find many online shops on the
internet
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, so the online shops usually sell their products with off and it’s so beneficial for people.
On the other hand
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, the online
shops it's
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shops, it's
 not enough for many people to use
instead
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 of shop in the cities.
First
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 of all, many people prefer to buy some expensive things
on
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in
at
 the stores in the cities. Because they can not trust online shops. And making trust
for
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of
 people on the websites is a hardship. Which means that they are virtual shops.
Secondly
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, for some industry like fashion people prefer to wear clothes and shoes in the stores
instead
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 of they guess the clothes are
fit
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fitted
fitting
 in their body. Especially the
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
women's
 are keen about the sizes of their clothes so they prefer to buy in physical stores. In conclusion, the online shops are growing and they provide
better
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a better life
life
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 for people and I
can not
can not
cannot
 agree more about that. But, many people especially
womens are
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women, are
women are
prefer
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preferred
 to have
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to try and touch products in the shops.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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