In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

As
population
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populations
the population
around the globe is on the
rise there are many
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rise, there are many
challenges faced by
majority
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the majority
a majority
of countries to facilitate
huge number
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the huge number
a huge number
of people in case of food, health, security etc.
However
, the environmental challenges being faced when it comes to constructing new places to live is the most significant one. Nowadays, the primary issue concerning the authorities is deforestation, which is in turn, adversely affecting the scenic beauty of rural areas and
environment
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the environment
of the whole region.
Initially
, to develop suburb in outer parts of
city
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the city
a city
which is home to many cattle farms and farmers. It will lead to the migration of those farmers and livestock animals.
However
, in those home
conditions many
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conditions, many
farmers are well known of
fertility
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the fertility
of the
soil but
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soil, but
at
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in
new place weather conditions and productivity of land is unknown to farmers.
As a result
, many products which grow in outskirts of city their mass production will eventually fall and all the dairy products which come from those cattle farms their provision will gradually decrease. Which will lead their prices to skyrocket.
In addition
,
this
may become cause to import of those goods and items which will not be locally available.
Hence
, it will increase
burden
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the burden
of pockets of the country.
Secondly
, to increase
number
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the number
of houses for increasing population there can be
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
possible way which
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possible way in which
many countries are following. To illustrate, many shopping malls, supermarkets, warehouses,
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
, cinemas and libraries in Japan are underground because public places like these don’t require much natural light. And according to a
report 90
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report, 90
percent of
population
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the population
of Japan will be squeezed in only 20 percent of
area
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the area
and
that is
only possible because of
this
invention. Which will provide countries with an immediate solution to counter
this
growing issue and will
also
emphasize on building of a modern infrastructure. In short, undoubtedly, there are numerous possible ways other than construction in
countryside
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the countryside
which may significantly affect a number of being living out there. We should be looking for a more modern mechanism which can actually cost us less than worsening of
spectacular beauty
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the spectacular beauty
of
rural areas
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the rural areas
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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