Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leaver in most countries How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face younger generation today?

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In the present era of political instabilities and social unrests, the

youth

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unemployment is worrying challenges for all of us. I strongly agree with the argument,

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, there are various leading problems as equally important as

younger generation's Jobless issues

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the younger generation's Jobless issues

. The purpose of

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that to illustrate why the younger generation's joblessness is important, and to explain other problematic issues faced us. In the

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unemployment is

serious problem

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a serious problem

in that it cannot move forward young

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person's

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and might ruin their economic prospects. By working, people not only achieving the lifetime

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earning living costs.

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is because, we are in the trend of hiring people who equipped with specialised skills and professional knowledge. Apart from the joblessness issues, there are divergent problems we should

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with. Foremost among these to perhaps the issue of the overpopulation. By advanced treatments and cutting edge technologies, lifespan is extended than before, on the flip side, the

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is decreased.

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younger generation

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the younger generation

should pay more taxes, and work longer hours to support the older generations. From the perspective of

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policy regard as unfair

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, the extreme complexion of

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a brain - drain phenomenon

, which is

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leaves their country that

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imposes

high taxes on their free will. From the view of the ministry, it should handle with serious matters due to the human workforce and taxation is the fundamental elements of the country. On the flip side, there are still problematic issues that threat to someone's

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as, alarmingly high level of trash, famine, outbreak of disease in developing countries. It is impossible to deal with,

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is because, the complex matters in a tangle comprised of countless factors, including civil wars, corruptions of man in the power, or political instabilities.

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, those problems are

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dangerous

to the

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to living,

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we should handle these urgently. In conclusion, I agree with the

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Joblessness is a huge problem

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for

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, we should remember that still out there have various issues that threat to population's

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the developing countries, and

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individuals should pay attention to these issues.

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Unemployment remains the biggest challenge to school-leaver in most countries How far do you agree with this assessment? What other challenges face younger generation today?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Some people think that children should only read academic book. Other believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In many countries, there is shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the country side, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the country?

The rise of social media platforms has made it easier for people to vent their frustrations and complaints publicly. What is the consequence of this trend? Is there any benefit to expressing complaints on social media?