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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatment may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Access to a good
health
service
 without a doubt is very important for every
people
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person
. As I say there is a poem that I know saying that
health
 is more important than
anything
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anything in this world
this
 world. But we know as the day goes by the cost of
health
 care is moderately
rising making
Accept comma addition
rising, making
 it unaffordable for many poor people. These are the reason why we should have a free
health
.
Firstly
 by providing a free
health
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government health service
service
government
 can help to end the suffering of the less advantaged member of
community
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a community
the community
 that couldn’t able to afford medical treatment.
Secondly
 because it is one of the
government
 job to ensure the wellbeing and welfare of its people and by giving that free
health
service
 the
government
 already did on of their duty. But
government
 must priorities medical services for the one who need it the most,
for example
 in Indonesia the
government
 give the less advantage people a card called “BPJS” to help them get an easy acces to
health
service
 but not all services can be given for free as for the expensive treatment they still have to pay but they can pay half of the price so its not entirely free. In conclusion, free
health
service
 is an important thing that people should have. And it is the
government
 duty to ensure the
wellbeing
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well being
 of their people by providing a free
health
service
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