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Pollution of air, water and soil has become critical in last years and it takes millions of years to recoup. What are the main causes of pollution? How can we tackle this problem individually and globally?

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Nowadays, the planet faces serious environmental concern from drink and air pollution to deforestation. One of the major causes of
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 phenomenon is human activity. In my opinion, both government and people contribute to solving these problems. There are two main reasons why environmental pollution has become increasingly worse.
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, the world population continues to grow while essential resources
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 as potable water, land, fossil fuels and minerals are limited.
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, the use of fossil fuels for energy to drive the personal vehicles and air condition for the houses increases the carbon concentration resulting
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 environmental effects.
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, many plants dump untreated waste into rivers and lakes, polluting the drink. These drink sources feed major crops and food becomes contaminated with a variety of chemicals and bacteria, causing rampant health problems.
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