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If children behave badly should their parents take responsibility and also be punished? State your answer and give your reasons. OR If a five year old commits a crime (any kind), should his/her parents accept responsibility and how should they be punished. What is the age of a child when parents no longer have the responsibility of a child’s behavior?

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The
first
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 diagram illustrates the different stages that a lady bird goes through during its life, while the
second
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 one shows its body structure. Overall, there are four steps in the life cycle of
this
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 bug and it begins with egg
stage
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 and ends with an adult insect.
This
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 whole process takes between 30 and 33 days to give a mature colourful bug with distinct red
elytra
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Initially
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, eggs are laid down on a leaf for 2 to 5 days. Once the eggs hatched, a larval
stage
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 starts by giving larvae and usually lasts for 21 days. After that, a pupa
stage
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 begins by curling on the backside of a leaf.
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, the pupa becomes an adult ladybird after seven days when the life cycle starts again. In regards to the anatomy of a mature ladybug, it is clear that it has two antennae and two eyes at the front of its head. The abdomen is covered by red and black spots
elytron
an elementary particle with negative charge
electron
that is
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 used as a wing to help the bug to fly. Similar to larval
stage
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, a mature
lady bird
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ladybird
 has six legs with three legs on each side.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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