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• Many countries raise fuel prices in order to deal successfully with problems pertaining to traffic and pollution. What effects do you think this move can have? What other measures do you think can be taken to reduce traffic and pollution?

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A lot of nations believe that by raising fuel prices they can efficiently solve the problems related to
traffic
 and
pollution
. Certainly, up to some extend
this
 can help in reducing the usage of vehicles leading to lowering the
traffic
 and
pollution
, but along with
this
 to curb
this problems
Suggestion
this problem
these problems
 some other methods must
also
 be implemented like encouraging
use
Suggestion
the use
 of public transportation and car pull. There has been a rise in the petrol prices since a
last
 decade now. Some argue that
this
 rise aids in reducing
use
 of personal vehicles for transportation. It is quite obvious that if fuel rates rise above a certain level many middle class and lower middle class people will not able to afford those high rates.
As a result
 of
this
 they have to stop using their motor vehicles and
use
 public transport
instead
.
Thus
, reducing the
traffic
 and
pollution
 created by vehicular exhaust.
For example
, the year in which the petrol rates increased to 90 rupees a litre it was found that lesser cars were seen on the road and the air was less polluted
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 the previous year. But increasing fossil fuel cost cannot fully solve the problem, many other practices are needed to be encouraged in order to achieve better results. The government must encourage citizens to
use
 more and more public transportations.
Also
, the employees who live near to each other and need to go to the same workplace can adopt the practice of car pull.
This
 method which seems very simple, can work wonders if implemented on a larger scale.
Also
, for going to nearby places it is advisable to
use
 a cycle or by walking, which can reduce dependence on motor vehicles and keep a person fit. To summarize, on one hand rising cost of petrol can lead to decrease in its usage, but at the same time it is necessary to implement other measures to reduce
traffic
 and
pollution
.
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