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Our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to change our character traits. To what extent do you agree?

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It is quite often believed that our persona is pre-decided on the basis of the genes we inherit and nothing can be done to amend it. I'm not in favour of
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 believe that one can alter his/her nature. It can be done by making small and daily changes in our lifestyle. Development of personality begins in the early years of life. What the child has seen and being taught while growing up immensely affects what persona he or she'll get.
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, people of all ages can learn from their social environment and make consistent improvements in their behaviours.
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, it's true that genes does predict the way we look to some
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 our nature is not completely dependent on it. A good personality can be evolved by honest self-evaluation and finding out where we are lacking. Knowing our weaknesses makes it easier for us to work on them. Having a positive attitude towards life in general will automatically improve your psyche. Consistent practice of controlling as well as directing emotions in the right path will in turn make a huge difference in the we we approach others.
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, people with anger issues, stress, anxiety, low self-esteem,
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 tend to meditate to flush out negativity. Some indulge in regular mental and physical exercise to bring beneficial changes in their attitude. To wrap up, I would say that pre-setting what traits and characteristics we'll live with for the rest our lives on the basis of our genes is quite foolish. Personality is an identity of a person. It completely depends on the an
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • predetermined
  • character traits
  • genetic influence
  • environmental factors
  • personality development
  • upbringing
  • foundation
  • evolution of traits
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