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Nowadays, a lot of people use credit cards for online shopping. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages ?

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In our century, many of us prefer to buy from internet with online payment.
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 is a method who can have many positive parts, but despite of
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 there is a negative part
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being one more than one
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. Online shopping is becoming more and more popular not only because is easier to buy, but
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 because people can pay with
credit
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 cards.Many banks offer
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 kind of payment in order to gain more and more clients.One of the reason why
credit
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card
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 is preferred by some people is because I they can buy expensive items and give
money
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 back when they have their salary.Another reason is that a
credit
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card
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 can be seen like a deposit with
money
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 in case of emergency.
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 kind of technology improve our lifestyle, people are more relaxed and buy everything what they want with the condition to return the
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 back.
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,
credit
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card
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 can be very fully, on
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card
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 are
money
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 who needs to be put back at a deadline.I believe that some people should be careful when start to use a
credit
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card
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 and to be sure that they have
money
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 to put back in order to respect the time limit. To conclude, I believe that the advantages of using a
credit
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card
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 outweigh the disadvantages and everyone should have
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 kind of
card
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.
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