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Teenagers should follow elders .They should challenge the thinking of elders. Discuss both and give your opinion.

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Teenage is a phrase of life in which children question almost everything around them and change their lives in any direction.We should advise them or let them do whatever they want. Elders play an important role in the lives of children they teach us
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correct us
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guide us and sometimes scold us to get us on the right path.They always support us and have our back in difficult times.Sometimes it is important for teenagers to follow the ideology of the elders as they have experienced more and can give us the best advise were ever required.Thinking of elders
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 always more calculative and measured. Teenagers tend to take risks in everything as their approach in life is different from elders. Teenagers are more lively than the elders they do not think of the consequences of the steps they take as they wan to live in the moment they tend to face their fears than to avoid them,Teenage should challenge the thinking of elders as thay can be worried about them for no reason and can stop them from exploring the environment or discover themselves. After discussing both the facts I think teenagers should follow elders to a certain level and can challenge their thinking as well. Challenging their thinking won't mean disobeying but arguing for a clarity is no wrong.
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