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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
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To begin
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 with, companies play an important role in society because of the increasing number of factories affected the environment’s problems. Some businesses have refused to invest in water treatment systems, which led to various environmental problems
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 as water pollution, air pollution.
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, Businesses could use the revenue of their profits to social.
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 means they can use
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 profit to support local charities, environmental projects, or education.
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, Vingroup, which is the biggest corporation in Vietnam, they spent a lot of
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 to build roads in my country to solve traffic problems.
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 of all, Businesses must make
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 in order to survive in a competitive world.
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 is because the business should be to cover its running costs,
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 as employees’ wages and payments for buildings and utilities.
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, Companies
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 need to invest in improvements and innovations if they wish to remain successful. The more
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 they make, the more taxes they will pay for the government.
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money
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 will be used to invest in important fields
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 as health, education, and infrastructure, which contributes to national sustainable development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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