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You are supposed to move into a new apartment but you can not do that so because of some problems. Write a letter to your landlord. Explain your situation Describe your problems Tell him when you can move in

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Dear
Mr.
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 Wilson Hope you and your family are healthy and safe in
this
 pandemic. I wanted to personally visit you to tell you that I have to push my moving date to September 15th
instead
 of September 1st, but it’s about 8 hours drive from where I live right now. The reason I cannot make it on decided time is
because
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 my father had an accident
last
 week, nothing to worry
, it’s
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 just a minor fracture in his right knee, he fell from his bicycle while trying to save a 5-year-old kid running to catch a balloon. The doctor strictly gave him bed rest for a month.
Although
, he is recovering very fast,
but
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me
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 and my mother are staying home to take care of him, but
mother
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the mother
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 is going back to work starting
next
 week and
then
 I would have to take care of my father. My brother is having his middle school exam starting
this
 week and he asked for my help in maths. He is the
second
 reason I want to stay a little longer. As discussed, my rent due date would not change and I will electronically transfer you my rent on September 1st. Regards,
abc
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ABC
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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