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Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?

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The table and pie chart provide the data about transportation and using of
car
 in Edmonton in the entire period. Overall, taxi and bus made up the smallest part of the chart and the most significant sector was
car
Suggestion
a car
the car
. The majority of people use
car
Suggestion
cars
the car
 for commuting to work, while the least popular purpose was shopping and leisure activities. Turning to the details, the sector of using a bus, as main transport mean, accounted for 10%, as well as taxi. In the case of light rail transit, it has comprised nearly one-
third
 of the chart, whereas the highest proportion of transportation has experienced almost a half of it. If we take into consideration business and taking children to school, as reason for driving a
car
, the difference between them is minor, with 45% and 40%. Following that were shopping and leisure activities, the figure for both them was 15%. As for commuting to work, the percentage was by far different, it has numbered 55%.
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