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One way to reduce the problem of traffic congestion is by increasing the tax on private vehicles. Do you think this is a feasible solution?

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To get the feeling of higher standards of living, most of the people have opted to buy their own personal vehicles which in turn have increased the road
traffic
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. One of the best
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 to control the issue of
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 jam is by taxing more on personal vehicles. In my opinion, I agree that imposing more
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 on personal vehicles will helps to control
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 jams.
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, an increase in
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 on personal vehicles will automatically reduce the purchasing ability of the people that helps in regulating
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 jams.
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, more people will try to use public transportation rather than buying a new vehicle because of the huge amount of
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. Even through, the more
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 is imposed on personal vehicles, certain people still opt to buy new vehicles which are difficult to put on hold.
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, imposing more
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 on personal vehicles should be combined with other policies as well.
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, in order to prevent and control
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 jams, the government can introduce policies like odd-even rule, one vehicle per family policy, car pooling etc. The odd-even rule is very effective technique as it has been already tested in many cities including Delhi which has heavy
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 congestion issue.
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, one vehicle per family policy is
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 seems to be very effective in preventing
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 congestion,
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 it is very restrictive policy. By introducing car pooling technique, many countries
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have reduced
 their heavy
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 condition which has
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 benefited their public. In conclusion, imposing more
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 on personal vehicles can reduce heavy
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 condition, if they are combined with other policies like odd-even rule and car pooling technique.
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