Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most of the manufactures have been using advertisement and equal to
this
, a vast amount of services or products are being exported and getting high prices
however
is it necessary to declare via advertising
to
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in
public? Personally, I disagree that society
do not need
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does not need
any particular advertisement for
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
products whether
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products, whether
it is food or any other. There is no doubt that, a lot of products and services are useless since they have no adequate aid for humanity. As an argument: pharmacy products
such
as tablets or liquid syrups do not need any special recognition by society because there are many salesmen in medical field.
In addition
, few medical products have negative effects on people due to their mixture contains
drug
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the drug
a drug
.
Furthermore
,
such
investors who own consumer goods spend massive amount of money for making their
products popular
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popular products
.
As a
result young
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result, young
generation reflects to what they see on social media or tv so government must not permit harmful advertisements to be shown.
On the other hand
, a few things should be
known
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known, for
for instance
: educational
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
or household items and products. Because they are useful and they do not harm as well as their fans are a lot. Many developed countries do not allow foods or junks unless
public vote
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the public vote
a public vote
for them so I deduce that it is
good way
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a good way
of preventing damage of junk food and support residents' rights. In overall, if something has
pros
the head of a religious order; in an abbey the prior is next below the abbot
priors
for general use, people should support it vise-versa deny it.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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