Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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While, in the competitive

era there

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era, there

is a contradiction that every

subject

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should be taken with importance, others believe that education should be framed in a way that

student

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students

the student

a student

can be

master

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mastered

in only the

one

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they like. I opine that children should be allowed to learn every

subject

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as it not only gives the knowledge of different fields but

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prepare them for competitive exams.

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, I believe that in absence of proficiency in unalike subjects at

young age

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a young age

will not prepare future in different curriculum. To elaborate, a

child

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child's

mind is extremely receptive and can understand every

subject

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with tranquility, which helps to prepare for different competitive exams understanding the intelligence

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different situations. Without learning different subjects,

thought process

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the thought process

will be confined only in

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direction.

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, according to the survey done

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Oxford University, it was observed that students with only

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subject

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expertise lost the quiz competition,

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, adolescent with grasping subjects like Geography, history, English, Mathematics did not lose.

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, it is really mandated for students to gain understanding of different subjects.

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, it has been observed that when children don’t

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focus

one

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subject

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of their choice loses interest in studies. Plethora of pupil who are not good in

history but

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history, but

they do wonders in mathematics. So,

this

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gives the opportunity to understand where to build the career.

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, most of the MBA graduates doesn’t require to be technically sound and they earn more than the people holding the degree of B.

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Tech

and MBA both.

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, it is not necessary to be

master

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a master

of all subjects rather, master of

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and jack of all. In my opinion, grasping variety of subjects gives gravity to the career and makes children an asset to an organization.

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To recapitulate, I would say, though the learning of every

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is essential in order to present yourself in

competitive environment

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a competitive environment

the competitive environment

, not focusing on

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subject

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doesn’t add value to be

expert

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an expert

the expert

experts

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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. But others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or that they find the most interest. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

More and more young people are using drugs and alcohol and as a result, breaking the law. What are the causes of this problem? What are some possible solutions?

Describe a tourist attraction that very few people visit but you think is interesting. What/Where the place is? What people can see there? Why only very few people visit there? And explain why you think it is interesting?

some people say that advertising is extremely successfull at persuading us to buy things. other peoplr think advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it discuss both views and give your opinion

International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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