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as global trade increases between different countries many daily necessities are produced in other countries.such goods are usually transported a long distance.Do the benefits outweigh its drawbacks?

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Globalisation has revolutionized our world in many aspects.Now
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we don't belong to a big planet earth.Everything is available everywhere.There are many advantages and disadvantages
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transporting goods over a long distance gives us a lot of choices.We can taste a variety of fruits and vegetables from all parts of the world.
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For
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about 10 years we hardly saw fruit, kiwi which is from Newzealand but now it is a place on every fruit shop.Earlier we had few shoe brands, but now we have the market flooded with Rebot
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Niki
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Adidas and other foreign brands.
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Many people get employment in
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it helps in developing a good relationship between countries which help in international cooperation and the piece.
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 countries are dependent upon one another economic success,
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then then
 the armed conflict would be less likely. On the down side
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importing goods can have a negative effect on local culture.
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 pollution when goods are transported thousand miles by road
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sea and air it increases pollution from exhaust fumes
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importing goods has both merits and demerits, but the pros outweigh the cones.
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